In your introductory paragraph and in all of your paragraphs there are some techniques you can use to make your writing more interesting.
Replace words to see if you can add more interest to your story.
I ran away from her, I sprinted away from her as fast as I could, or she dashed behind me.
I hid behind a tree, I peeked out slowly, she was wandering in between the trees, it’s much more interesting than she walks, she walked. It just adds more interesting rhythm to your story
How about another word that we use a lot. Look or see. How about some other interesting words for look or see. Observe, stare, spy, to spy, your spy, peek or peep, gaze, glimpse. If your character is seeing something for the first time. Notice, if I’m really looking for something really hard and I can’t find it, I’m looking for my keys. I’m searching.
Think of different ways that a person could say something because of the tone of voice, so someone saying something really loud rather than they said that softly. What word could you use instead of said? Shout, something that’s really loud, someone saying something really loud.
Exclaimed, excellent, these are excellent, scream. How about if someone’s really sad, oh they might whisper, cry, cried, sobbed, sob, whimper, whimpered.
If you were saying something like you were really proud about it, super proud, brags, bragged, boasted, told when often they really mean ask.
Asked, asked questions, acknowledged, added, admitted, advised, decrees, denounced, answered, approved, called, claim, command, commented, complained, cried, decide, lied, mentioned, moaned, mumbled, murmured, nagged, noted, notified, objected, ordered, pleaded, pointed out, preyed, predicted, question, reassured, related, repeated, replied, responded, requested, stated, revealed, roared, ruled, scold, scream, shouted, shrieks, snaps, teared, sobs, stammered, storm, suggested, taunted, thought, told, urged, uttered, vowed, wailed, warns.
When you’re using dialogue, when there are two characters speaking to each other please pay attention the punctuation. Use the free version of Grammerly to help you with this.
Another important area are transitions. Think of some other transitions that might relate to time. If you had a whole bunch of events you were talking about, how could you help your reader get from one event to the next. If it’s happening right now, immediately, immediately afterward. There are so many transitions that can be used to make the writing stronger.
If you wish you may start your story with a prompt where you may begin it in a way that suits you.? EX: in the village of, or town or city. Then write the name of the character that you’ve chosen. The rest of your first paragraph you’re going to do the introduction, you’re going to give us the setting, taking a moment to close your eyes, picture what you’re seeing. If you use your five senses when you write it really helps to create that picture. Rather than just telling, your showing.
You’re showing so if you’re thinking about the forest where he lives, think about naming a few of the flowers, you might see or the different kinds of trees, the vines that are dangling down from the ceiba tree, something like that.
If you’re describing what he’s wearing, he lives in the forest so his clothes are not going to be all ironed and starched and cleanly washed. If you describe what he’s wearing, his coffee stained shirt was tattered and torn, tucked into pants that were to short, his boots caked in mud. You can picture that it’s real.
Your first paragraph if you could have at least five or six sentences that are giving the who of the character traits of the character you’ve chosen. Where you would see this character, where you would find them, and a little bit about what they do in the setting where they live. Pretend your reader has no idea who any of these are, they have never heard of them ever. Begin writing and just enjoy it have fun with it